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can you hold it against—
a sycophantic apparition in the daylight
you've got patent leather heels toeing through the ash
he's a blight in the night with sky stained black
ink and glass slashed in the middle of a map
in the pouring rain

waiting for the call
where there's blood there is love in a
casket or a house that was a museum before
and a store or a bed and breakfast
in the guise of a business arrangement
instead of splendid cavalier

he's your romeo and you're his new perspective
wrapped in contract wax and gauzy continuity

he
    says
        things
              that
people shouldn't
[ murmur how to pick a lock, steal a car  
that her nails don't quite match her lipstick and ]
you cannot ignore
[ to make improvised incendiary weapons
out of matchsticks and petrol soaked rags ]

although you are made up of ash dust,
vermillion papercuts, coy whispers of lewdness
his inspired compliments
breathing enough to say he's not unpretty
licking blood off your fingers
and respire in time to say
i do
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:icon1nkl1ng:
I love how this flows, and how there are so many beautiful almost-rhymes throughout. :)
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~Karinta Mar 6, 2013  Student General Artist
The flow is addictive. It rolls along without any prompting. I like the ash/black/glass/slashed half-rhymes in the first stanza.

Oh, and vermilion, not "vermillion". But otherwise it's good.
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:iconsomethingsophie:
Thank you very much! (:

Both spellings are actually correct, although you are right in that 'vermilion' was the original spelling and is in more common use, while 'vermillion' is seldom used except in application to the pure chroma color.
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~Karinta Mar 8, 2013  Student General Artist
Ah, I see. :D You're welcome!
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`FuzzyHoser Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really love this; it's so unique and strangely charming. :heart:!
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:iconsomethingsophie:
You put the best adjectives in your compliments. :heart: Thank yooou.
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
`FuzzyHoser Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...my adjectives are based off how much a piece engages me, so that's all your doing, dear. (:
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~violetense Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
beautiful and haunting.
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